WALT: use descriptive language to gain and maintain audience interest.
We have been trying to make our writing descriptive using interesting adjectives and verbs, alliteration, similes, metaphor and personification. Which of the poems below do you think is most descriptive?
Elise,I liked the way you used Ruby red as an alliteration and divine like a princess as a metaphor but maybe next time you could use a simile From Isabelle.
Xavier,I like the way you have used Puffy as a cloud as a simile and some information like Best not hunted but maybe next time you could use metaphors From Isabelle.
Oliver, I really liked the way how you used "stripes like a snake" as a similie and "is a crawling baby" as your metaphor. Next time you could put some alliteration in or even personification.
Oliver, I really liked the way how you used "stripes like a snake as a similie and "is a crwaling baby" as a metaphor. Next time you could put some alliteration in or even personification.
Oliver, I really liked how you used "stripes like a snake" as a similie and "is a crawling baby" as a metaphor. Next time you could put n some alliteration or even some personification.
Hannanh I like the way you have put a simile red as a ruby.Next time you could put a metaphor. Andrea
ReplyDeleteElise,I liked the way you used Ruby red as an alliteration and divine like a princess as a metaphor but maybe next time you could use a simile From Isabelle.
ReplyDeleteXavier,I like the way you have used Puffy as a cloud as a simile and some information like Best not hunted but maybe next time you could use metaphors From Isabelle.
ReplyDeleteI really likle how you put puffy fur xaier next time you could put in onomatopoeias. From Ella.
ReplyDeleteElise I really liked how you put your enthusiastic like a singer and your dazzling fur next time you could use some onomatopoei from amelia
ReplyDeleteXavier,i really like how you put rear as rubies as a simile and information like best not hunted but next time you could put a metopor in from katie
ReplyDeleteOliver, I really liked the way how you used "stripes like a snake" as a similie and "is a crawling baby" as your metaphor. Next time you could put some alliteration in or even personification.
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Oliver, I really liked the way how you used "stripes like a snake as a similie and "is a crwaling baby" as a metaphor. Next time you could put some alliteration in or even personification.
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Oliver, I really liked how you used "stripes like a snake" as a similie and "is a crawling baby" as a metaphor. Next time you could put n some alliteration or even some personification.
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