The Magic Box
I will put in the box,
the dazzle from my great Nana's diamond earrings,
the heat from the house fire blazing brightly,
the touch of my mummy's hand hugging me with love.
I will put in the box,
the first shining smile Meghan smiled at me,
a talking teddy that shares my secrets,
the perfect picture of my magnificent mummy and papa.
I will put in the box,
the glistening glint from the moon reflecting off the sea,
a blossoming flower coming from my cousin,
my lucky charm stuffed in a pillow.
I will put the box,
a ray of sun light that bounces round,
a shadow of my special teacher Miss Dare teaching the class,
and a purple balloon from my first birthday.
My box is fashioned with electricity veined ice,
with snow flakes imprinted on the lid.
Its rain drop hinges only open,
with the timely touch of my hand.
I shall dash around in my box
running in the verdancy of the field,
then falling over and dropping into a nest of daisies,
the colour of snow.
By Alissandra
Dear Miss Moosy I like the way you have used awesome descriptive language to add effect to your writing for example alliteration when you said magnificent mummy and perfect picture.My favourite stanza is the last one where instead of using boring adjectives and nouns you have used ones that enhance your writing. Through this piece of writing you have clearly given a message about who you are
ReplyDeleteAlissandra what a beautiful piece of writing. Your last stanza is stunning. The careful choice of adjectives and the imagery you use is quite beautiful. Ka mau te wehi young lady.
ReplyDeleteI loved your poem. It was really moving to see the whole family making an appearance in your writing. Look forward to reading some more of your creations.
ReplyDeleteI love your writing and how you put stuff about our family in it.thanks for putting something about me in it to. You used lots of big or as you would say 'gargantuan' words in it. From Meghan ;)
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